Sunday, November 8, 2015

First Draft

  The performance of my group is based on a tragic play written by William Shakespeare - Romeo and Juliet. William Shakespeare was definitely one of the most successful English playwright in history, a lot of his pieces reflect his personal experiences. Romeo and Juliet  is a classic demonstration of immature, naive love. The play basically illustrates a story-line which develops upon the feud between the two families - Montague and Capulet, and ends with a grieving scene that both of the young lovers died. Every Acts of the story are closely connected in Romeo and Juliet, a substantial amount of elements in the early parts of the play actually foreshadows the tragic ending. The performance of my group demonstrates the hatred of between the families, by showing the easy-irritating emotions of the two families, plus fighting and death. This hatred grants the inability of the families to treat the young lovers fairly. Under the pressure from that atmosphere, led to the final tragedy in the play.  There are plenty of scenes that show the hatred of the families clearly. My group picked three of them that best strengthen the idea that mentioned above. In Act 1 Scene 1 and 5, Act 3 Scene 1, My performance used different colors' costumes to distinguish the two families, while the fight actions and language adaptations to present the theme of hostility.


  The first scene I chose is shortened and adapted from Act 1 Scene 1. The setting of this scene is located among the Verona Streets. The two Capulet members, Gregory and Sampson entered the scene with weapons and started showing discrimination against the Montague family. Next, one of the underclass man of Montague, Abram came in and began arguing with the two Capulet. It ended up with a fight, Abram died from the Capulet's blades. In the original play, there isn't any instruction that shows Abram died during the fight. So his death is one of the adaptations in our performance - in order to show the overflowing rage. Another significant adaptation is that the fight stopped right after the two Capulet stabbed Abram. So the later scene which the prince conciliates the fight disappeared. Every adaptations that we did was under the purpose of maximize the expression of feud. There are a good amount of lines that are the straight clues of the insolvable conflict between the characters. In the beginning of the scene. Gregory and Sampson started the conversation like this:" I mean, an we be in choler, we'll draw."(Act 1 Scene 1, line 3) So their obvious willingness of fighting is shown right at the beginning. Also, the line by Sampson:"A dog of that house shall move me to stand. I will take the wall of any man of or maid of Montague's"(Act 1 Scene 1, line 12-13) is another perfect example of their discrimination to the Montague. The analogy of Montague members to the dog presents their attitude toward the other family. Followed by those provoking judgments, Abram responded to the "thumb biting" action of Sampson. " Do you bite your thumb at us sir?" (Act 1 Scene 1, line 45) Noticing that Abram here used the term "us" instead of "me", there were supposed to have more than one Montague members, but we decided to cut the other ones except for Abram, so the Capulet were able to overpopulate him and then kill him. And finally, after the line"Draw if you be man"(Act 1 Scene 1 line 63), Abram died under Sampson's sword.This first scene might looks non-related to the two lovers - Romeo and Juliet, but it actually plays an important role of setting up the background and establishing the tone for the entire play. This fight is only the beginning. One of the reason why we picked the theme of feud, is that the it is such a gigantic portion of the play. Performing the beginning part efficiently shows how the feud covers the entire play, Shakespeare really made effort on introduce the story background at the beginning. The fightings made people ruthless and blind. During the prince's speech, he expresses that:"If ever you disturb our streets again, Your lives shall pay the forfeit of the peace ."(Act 1 Scene 1 line 98-99). This line becomes a metaphor for the later incidents. The idea is always: No matter how deep Romeo and Juliet's love is, the feud is always going to cause a dead end in this story. The end is already settled at the beginning, a really complicated and vague connection.

  The next scene was originated from Act 1 Scene 5, it was picked under a tough discussion. The scene took place in the feast held by the Capulet. In this scene, Romeo first met his "true love"- Juliet, everything started on track. However, one of the main character - Juliet did not appear in this scene in my performance, because it was adapted to show Tybalt's discrimination to Romeo. In our performance, the scene started with the entering of Romeo to the party After a relatively short monologue, Tybalt appeared and began pouring vicious words to the young man behind his back. Following that is the conversation between Tybalt and his uncle - Capulet, the head of family. At the end Tybalt leaves with unsatisfied and envious emotions. In Romeo's monologue, he just simply appraised the girl and expressed his overflowing love. "O, she doth teach the torches to burn bright! It seems she hangs upon the cheek of night"(Act 1 Scene 5, line 51-52). His personalities caused a lot of troubles for him, including taking risk to go to enemy's banquet without invitation. What happened next is another foreshadow of the later fight. Our performance erased everything before Romeo's monologue to directly show this close connection to the next scene. When Tybalt noticed Romeo's appearance, the fury blinds his eyes, my performance kept all his lines. "Come hither covered with an antic face to fleer and scorn at our solemnity ? Now, by the stock and honor of my kin, To strike him dead I hold it not a sin."(Act 1 Scene 5, line 64-67), this line clearly indicates Tybalt's willingness to fight Romeo. The relationship between Romeo and Tybalt had been always the biggest person-to-person conflict in the play, their destinies are binding together, only one can survive. From the scene, we can tell that Tybalt's personalities are extremely different from Romeo's. Romeo is a young man that put too much focus on his love, his language is poetic and gentle. On the other hand, Tybalt is the representative of hatred. He just doesn't care, takes whatever he needs to slain his enemy. By performing Act 1 Scene 5, I not only established a straight link between this scene and Act 3 Scene 1, but also indicates how much trouble Tybalt will bring to Romeo and change him. Under the pressure, Romeo finally changed and revealed the dark side of him which will be shown in the next scene.

   In my point of view, Romeo is neither a virtuous nor peaceable young man. He is kind of a unstable and tragic protagonist. At the beginning of the play, he's language brings readers an impression of innocent character, the young man is so overwhelmed by his love and life, that he is not possibly able to commit such murder in the later scene. However, showing the drastic change of Romeo is exactly my purpose in the last scene, the extraction of Act 3 Scene 1.



























Saturday, November 7, 2015

Reflection and Improvement

  The main theme of this performance is that how does the feud between two families aggravated the atmosphere and led to the final tragedy. The performance includes three scenes: 1.1, 1.5, 3.1. We have been always trying to show the hatred in our play; In the first scene, the members of two families started arguing and it turned out to be a fight. One thing that did not exist in the original play was Abram's death. Abram's death is our interpretation on their hatred, and it's also a extreme way to do it. In order to better present the intensity, our group even cut the prince's lines after the fight, because intervention and conciliation were existing against our main theme. I believe we were successful on showing the feud in this scene. However, as a trade, we did abandon some elements that were supposed to be significant such as the prince's role that I mentioned above. That's why our play does not present "Romeo and Juliet" in a full perspective.
  Our performance wasn't perfect. Plenty of small mistakes took place: the actors forgot to face the audience for a few times; we starred at the script for too long; and most importantly, all of us didn't express our emotions through face expressions. I didn't realize that until I watched other groups' performances. Ryan's group was definitely the best one, each actor had obvious face expressions. The lack of face expression and the varying tone made our performance a little bit plain. For example, when we were having the "deadly conversation" in Act 1 Scene 1, our faces seemed like we were just having a random talk about last night's dinner. Another example would be the moment in Act 3 Scene 1, when Mercutio was dying. Romeo didn't show enough grief and even laughed for a few times. It was just not good enough. Of course, we weren't well prepared and the absence of our group member made it even harder.
  In additional, our play was missing a significant element - music. Most of the other performances had background music and they turned out pretty impressive. Music can not only help present the atmosphere better, but also show the personalities of the actors through selecting it. I saw humor and seriousness in other groups. However, there was a new element that played pretty good role, which was the costume. We had never weared medieval costumes before, they made the performance more realistic. For example, I used to wear academic dress in performance, it didn't fit the play at all. This time, I have a green costume on, it looked much better. Also, we used the colors green and black to distinguish the Capulet and Montague.
  Our acting ability improved a lot since the first performance in this course. I added plenty of body languages in the play, and my voice was much louder. For other group members, they are much confident than before.
  After all, we tried our best to present the theme of the performance, I can see a lot of improvements in it, but the defects still exist.






Friday, November 6, 2015

Tuesday, November 3, 2015

Comments on first draft

  The actual performance reflects a lot of problems on the first draft. The largest issue is definitely the length of the play. Comparing to other groups, my group has one to two more scenes to perform. We need to cut a lot of lines from the original play in order to keep the time within 5 minutes. There were a few lines that aren't as important as others, such as one of the Mercutio speech, "An thou make minstrels of us, look to hear nothing but discords. Here’s my fiddlestick"(3. 1 47-48). Editing the draft really provide us deeper understandings to this play.
  With the absence of one of our group members, the editing becomes even harder. Eric and I have to distribute those lines evenly, so we can have the same length of speeches. We have to read the draft over and over again to try to fill up the blank.
  Also, every scene that we picked have more than 3 characters in them. We edited them so that only 2-3 characters have lines. This time, we decided to invite a guest performer to help us instead of cutting another character's lines, because the lack of sentences can't express our theme - the feud as well. For draft #2, we want to keep editing the draft until it best describes how the feud between two families became tragedies.

Monday, November 2, 2015

In class writing

  In Act 1 Scene 1, I'm playing as Abram, who's a servant to Montague. The main issue of this scene is the feud between two families. During the conflict against the Capulet's servants, I need to show my anger and scorn. A few ways to represent those are raising the volume of my voice and body languages. When One of the Capulet bites his thumb at me, I need to be a little bit shocked that he does that and then be really angry. Another great way to ungrade the feud performance is the exaggeration of the sword fighting actions.
  In Act 1 Scene 5 and Act 3 Scene 1, I will be playing as Tybalt, who is also a really angry character. I have to carry the hate to Romeo all along according to the play. In 1.5, Capulet tries to stop me from going after Romeo, I need to show discontented and unsatisfied emotions. In 3.1, I'm fighting against two enemies, so my hate drives me to kill Mercutio and Romeo will kill me after.









Saturday, October 31, 2015

draft

Ben: Abram, Tybalt
Eric: Sampson, Capulet, Romeo
Lucie: Gregory, Romeo, Mercutio

1.1
Sampson:
Gregory,on my words we’ll not carry coals.

Gregory:
No, for then we should be colliers.

Sampson:
A dog of the house of Montague shall move me to stand.I will take the wall of any man or maid of Montague’s.

Gregory:
They must take it in sense that feel it.

Sampson:
Me they should feel while I am able to stand and ‘tis known I am a pretty piece of flesh.

Gregory:
Draw thy tool. Here comes of the house of Montagues.

Enter Abram

Gregory:
I will frown as I pass by, and let them take it as they list.

Sampson:
Nay, as they dare, I will bite my thumb at them, which is disgrace to them if they bear it.

Abram:
Do you bite your thumb at us, sir?

Sampson:
No, sir, I do not bite my thumb at you.

Abram:
You lie.

Gregory:
Do you quarrel, sir?

Abram:
Quarrel? No.

Sampson:
Draw if you be men.

They Fight

1.5
Romeo:
What lady’s that which doth enrich the hand of yonder knight?
O, she doth teach the torches to burn bright! It seems she hangs upon the cheek of night as a rich jewel in an Ethiop’s ear
Did my heart love till now? Forswear it, sight, For I ne’er saw true beauty till this night.
Tybalt:
This, by his voice, should be a Montague. Fetch me my rapier, boy. What, dares the slave Come hither covered with an antic face To fleer and scorn at our solemnity ?
Capulet:
Why, how now, kinsman? Wherefore storm you so?
Tybalt:
Uncle, this is a Montague, our foe, A villain that is hither come in spite To scorn at our solemnity this night.
Capulet:
Young Romeo is it?
Tybalt:
’Tis he, that villain Romeo.
Capulet:
Content thee, gentle coz. Let him alone. He bears him like a portly gentleman.
Show a fair presence and put off these frowns, An ill-beseeming semblance for a feast.
Tybalt:
It fits when such a villain is a guest. I’ll not endure him.
Capulet:
You’ll not endure him! God shall mend my soul, You’ll make a mutiny among my guests,
Tybalt:
Patience perforce with willful choler meeting
Makes my flesh tremble in their different greeting.
I will withdraw, but this intrusion shall,
Now seeming sweet, convert to bitt’rest gall.

Scene 3.1

TYBALT
Follow me close, for I will speak to them.
MERCUTIO
And but one word with one of us? couple it with
something; make it a word and a blow.
TYBALT
Mercutio, thou consort'st with Romeo,--
MERCUTIO
Consort! what, dost thou make us minstrels?
here's my fiddlestick; here's that shall
make you dance.

Enter ROMEO

TYBALT
Well, here comes my man.
Romeo, the hate I bear thee can afford
No better term than this,--thou art a villain.
ROMEO
Tybalt, the reason that I have to love thee
Doth much excuse the appertaining rage
To such a greeting: villain am I none;
Therefore farewell; I see thou know'st me not.
TYBALT
Boy, this shall not excuse the injuries
That thou hast done me; therefore turn and draw.
ROMEO
I do protest, I never injured thee,
But love thee better than thou canst devise,
Till thou shalt know the reason of my love:
MERCUTIO
O calm, dishonourable, vile submission!
Draws
Tybalt, you rat-catcher, will you walk?
TYBALT
What wouldst thou have with me?
MERCUTIO
Good king of cats, nothing but one of your nine
lives; that I mean to make bold withal.
Will you pluck your sword out of his pitcher
by the ears?

TYBALT
I am for you.
Drawing

ROMEO
Gentle Mercutio, put thy rapier up.
MERCUTIO
Come, sir, your passado.
They fight

ROMEO
Gentlemen, for shame, forbear this outrage!
Hold, Tybalt! good Mercutio!
TYBALT under ROMEO's arm stabs MERCUTIO, and flies

MERCUTIO
I am hurt.
A plague o' both your houses! I am sped.
ROMEO
What, art thou hurt?
MERCUTIO
Ay, ay, a scratch, a scratch

ROMEO
Courage, man; the hurt cannot be much.
MERCUTIO
Ask for me to-morrow, and you shall find me a grave man.
A plague o'both your houses!
Why the devil came you between us?
I was hurt under your arm.

ROMEO
I thought all for the best.
MERCUTIO
A plague o' both your houses!

ROMEO
O, brave Mercutio's dead!
Here comes the furious Tybalt back again.
Re-enter TYBALT

Now, Tybalt, take the villain back again,
Either thou, or I, or both, must go with him.
TYBALT
Thou, wretched boy, that didst consort him here,
Shalt with him hence.
ROMEO
This shall determine that.
They fight; TYBALT falls

ROMEO
The citizens are up, and Tybalt slain.
The prince will doom thee death,
O, I am fortune's fool!

Exit ROMEO

Thursday, October 29, 2015

The foreshadowing of feud

  My paper for the IB project, will be mainly focusing on the topic of how the feud between two families - Capulet and Montague foreshadows the final tragedy. Speaking of foreshadowing, it usually represents an inevitable ending, which in this play is the death of both Romeo and Juliet. Foreshadowing is an unique literary feature that can help me to accomplish a description on development along the plot. My main goal is to show the influence of conflict, and only certain events can support the idea. A few good examples would be the fighting scenes of Act 1 Scene 1 (The beginning)and Act 3 Scene 1(Where Mercutio and Tybelt died). This method improves my logical thinking because in order to manage and make good connections between those scenes, I have to perform better organization. Also, through the deeper exploration of foreshadowing, I will be able to have a clearer vision on the interpretation of why the scenes take place.

  The scenes that My group and I are going to perform is those two I mentioned in the former paragragh. I believe those scenes have the best demonstration of the feud between Capulet and Montague. There might be an extra part from Act 1 Scene 5(the feast held by Capulet, and Romeo sneaked in) depend on the timing of other scenes. I helps explaining the origin of the fight that takes place in Act 3 Scene 1, but it won't be as important. During the performance, I really want to show the extreme of the two sides' hatred. As we all know, Capulet and Montague's dissension was built during a long period of time, and will have horrible effect on their heirs - Romeo and Juliet. If the hatred can be interpreted during the fight, it might bring up the discussion of will Romeo and Juliet have a good ending under this scenario; and how will they undergo the pressure from it.

  In the final performance, there will be three actors participating. Eric will play as Mercutio in Act 3 Scene 1 and Capulet in Act 1 Scene 5(If necessary). Lucie will play as Romeo throughout the entire scenes. I will be Tybelt in those scenes. We are going to cut several lines in order for each person to  have the same lengths of speech. Also, the distribution of characters can add extra parts to fill the blank.